Animatic Feedback

This is feedback from our classmates and teacher after they watched our animatic.

Firstly our teachers feedback. The first bit of feedback was that our diagetic sound was good and therefore wot have to be changed. The next was that we had to cut down on the loneliness, as it appears to be the subject of the film, however it isn't as extremism is, we will cut down the classroom scene to 1 minute maximum to tone down the loneliness.  Next was the suggestion of changing the music throughout as only two soundtracks were used, however there should be more changes. Also the findabuddy.com website appeared comical to the audience and isn't how it was supposed to be portrayed, therefore must be changed. Finally the message of the film wasn't even shown until 5 minutes in and therefore should be drip fed throughout the entire film. 

Within the class feedback we found out that: the audience understood that Harry was lonely and was bullied as well as found comfort online. One thing that wasn't clear however was the extremism as it wasn't drip fed. It was also recommended that more of the conversation between Harry and the extremist is shown. We were also told that we had a wide variety of shots although tracking shots could be used as well. Our non-diagetic sound wasn't good as there was no variation between shots and movements. Also the music used was very boring after a while as it didn't change, therefore additional tracks should be used. It was also recommended that some dialogue between the bullies and Harry is exchanged as the non-diagetic ringing occurs.

Overall

Positives:

• Easily identifiable genre
• Good portrayal of isolation
•  Good range of shots

Negatives:

• Not a clear narrative
• Poor non-diagetic sound 
• Poor music use
• Too long of a classroom scene
• Dialogue 
• Unrealistic website name
• Not enough interaction with extremist

Considering these details we will go back to our storyboard and alter some aspects and well as keep some that worked well. There are elements that don't need to be changed, however there are elements which need to be extracted, and some elements that need additions. Over the coming days these aspects that we had feedback on will be altered. 

Animatic of Short Film

This is an animated version of our storyboard. We have done this to make sure that the the sound we want matches the actions, as well as the narrative flows well as is understandable, as well as bordering the 5 minute mark. Below is the animatic:

Camera Work in the Drama Genre

Mise En Scene in the Drama Genre

Textual Analysis 5:The Most Beautiful Thing

Just the portrayal that we want to achieve in our film. The protagonist is a lonely isolated boy, who looks for acceptance and confidence. Now nearing the end of his school days, all he seeks is to end it with someone who he can consider his friend/ girlfriend. Therefore half way through the film he meets a girl, a deaf girl by the name of Emily and they live out their relationship through the use of a pen and paper. Further following the convention of a simple plot, often not involving in-depth dialogue. Their love is momentarily halted by an arrogant "cool kid", who tries to steal and kiss the protagonists girlfriend. However she eventually speaks out to him and he ends up asking her to prom, which was one of his greatest concerns for the boy.

Due to the time constraints on a short film, plenty of enigma codes can be seen throughout. One enigma code that I first noticed was when the boy first returns home at the beginning he calls to his parents, only to receive no answer, but he called as if he expected them to be there at that time. They're not there and could be why he feels so alone and isolated. If this film were to be extended it could be easily drawn out, thus proving that the plot has depth and interest even though presented through a shortened format.

The film starts at the beginning relying heavily on the use of a bench, using it as a catalyst to fuel the relationship between the two characters. However as there relationship blooms you see her visit his home and other places around the school, thus broadening the variety of setting as well as delving further into the plot.

Going back to the repeated use of the bench, due to the position of the bench it indeed limits the use of cinematography. Thus leaving the shots to mostly consist of medium shots and close ups, as well as shot reverse shots. However close ups are used throughout the film, due to the emotional nature of the film to convey the characters true emotions, thus allowing the audience to empathise and relate to the characters.

Sound in the Drama Genre

Editing in the Drama Genre