Film Review: First Draft and Feedback

Here is my first attempt at the film review. There were some positives as well as negatives that I needed to change to allow for the best final review.

Here is the first draft:

After my feedback, I had a lot of improvements to make. Firstly the biggest problem. My review, wasn't very focused on reviewing the film, it more so gave an overview of what happens throughout. So most of the text had to be rewritten so that it captures my opinion as the feedback recommends. 

Another less significant problem was the picture caption. It was taking up mots of the left third of the page and it shouldn't have been a caption. Rather a pool quote which summarises the review in a sharp line/quote. Therefore this was added and the caption was shrunk and moved into the lower right fifth of the picture (hadn't been taken yet).

The date issue and page number were too large so were also shrunk. In the issue of empire black lines are used to underline/ separate the top information from the review itself. 

Now the minor the layout needed to have at least a 0.5mm band all the way around, as well as having everything in line as opposed to scattered like I did. 

Finally I have to add the page number very small at the bottom alongside the name of the magazine, 'Empire' and the issue date of the magazine.

These are all of the different changes I need to make to create my final and best review.